Comments for Writing or Something Like It

Comment on Am I a Narcissist? by Chum

Chum — Sat, 07 Jun 2008 21:23:05 +0000

How ironic… if you went back and counted all the ‘I’s in your blog posts…

Comment on Am I a “Writer?” by sallen

sallen — Mon, 28 Apr 2008 16:30:24 +0000

I like what you’ve done with the formatting here!
-drA

Comment on My return to blogging… :-/ by sallen

sallen — Mon, 28 Apr 2008 16:27:32 +0000

Yes, this sense of community and of intellectual exchange is exactly what I’m trying to figure out… for this forum. We’ll see.
Nicely done here, Jocelyn.
All best,
DrA

Comment on Race in my writing by Kerri

Kerri — Tue, 12 Feb 2008 15:13:56 +0000

Hey Jocelyn,
I completely agree with you in this post. The thing is that we live in a predominately white community, especially when we were younger and our writing process was being formed. Even now as the United States is becoming more diversified, our writing processes are still affected by the white race. That’s what I realized when I wrote mine. I thought well I do not think of race in my writings and I didn’t think it affected mine, but the I realized that the white race has affected my writings because I am surrounded by a predominately white community. I think this piece was very reflective and I know a lot of people can relate to it because we normally do not think race affects our writing. Nice post!

Comment on Am I a Narcissist? by DrA

DrA — Tue, 12 Feb 2008 03:10:18 +0000

nicely done jocelyn! thanks for weighing in on this one.
best,
dra

Comment on Corbett by DrA

DrA — Fri, 08 Feb 2008 19:35:56 +0000

Nicely done, Jocelyn!

Comment on Jocelyn by Joey

Joey — Mon, 04 Feb 2008 15:50:37 +0000

Day Two
Okay, for Claire you didn’t say anything and that was sad because i had nothing to report back on. So moving on…
Margaret
You told Margaret that you liked her analogy of organic and something else, i think you said words but i missed it. You questioned Margaret’s “love of academic phrase” verse “love of her voice.” Nice observation.
For Brandon
the last quote could have been a conclusion, because the conclusion he had was more a an after thought. You enjoyed his humor and the line about the staring competition between him and his computer.
When you talked about Jennifer, you said
The switch between first and second person shift was weird. She should label her classmates as the critics. The paper began to read like a manuel which you liked in tone because it was interesting but it lacked author’s emotions. You suggested that she read it out loud to catch mistakes.
On Kelsey’s paper you said
her rhythm and phrases are good, but she needs to expand on how she felt. Great intensity in the beginning but it lose that intensity over the course of the paper, and Kelsey needs to stop telling and show us more of her feelings. And you said that Elbow’s plan to challenge could lead Kesley to talk about her challenge, to make things more interesting. Also, during this session Stephanie gave you “mad props” by hollarin’ back at your comments earlier, so you should get credit for that. You inspired others.

Comment on Jocelyn by Joey

Joey — Fri, 01 Feb 2008 02:49:56 +0000

Okay Jocelyn, lets being.
For critique on your paper, your peers thought your paper was well organized, receptive and I believe you were a good listener. For your comments on others i have placed below each person’s name.
Caitlin
you said…
she had smaller ideas but no big overall one
should expand on past writing process
explain why each of thee things is her process
Julianne
you said…
complement on introduction
lack of introduction to the rest of the paper
expand on the thesis
Stephanie
you said…
honest, opened everything in an informal way
page one and a half is the introduction, try to condense in order to get to meat of paper
You liked the conclusion
Antonia
you said…
commented on the “self correcting” and being more self aware in paper
referred to the 2nd paragraph but i don’t remember why
integrate and expand on Elbow’s section through out the paper